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What scene never made it into your story?

There are always ton of scenes that don't make it into my story. I often can't quite bring myself to fully throw them away, so I stash them in a document. I figured others would have some of those scenes too, so why not share them?

Please no story links unless someone specifically asks you for one! This is not the place to self-promote.

Here is my scene. I wanted it to be a break after quite an emotional moment, but decided to cut it, because while a break was needed it didn't quite recognize the impact of the scene prior:

There is only one other person in the training hall, a mage with short hair and a soft face. The morning sun that beams through the window makes their sword shimmer as they lift it.

I remain in the door, watching their shadow slide over the floor while they move their weapon like it's a dance. They have a strange, but welcome calmness about them, and the air in the room still feels light. It almost feels like time stopped here before yesterday's events.

The eyes of the mage meet mine, and a smile curls up their lips. They slide the sword back in its scabbard and walk up to the rack with wooden swords, silently lifting one in my direction.

I nod and take one of the training swords, before following them to the centre of the room. Silently I study their posture. I can see they are muscular, even though their loose black clothes try to hide it.

I catch their eyes sliding past my body as well, probably in an attempt to estimate how much of an opponent I will be. Something tells me they will royally misjudge me. I'm strong from all the years of manual labour, and the scars on my arms give the false sense that I've got experience.

Out of nowhere, the mage attacks. I can barely raise my sword to block. The sound of the blow breaks the fragile silence in the air.

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u/Empty_Ad_9455 — 4 days ago
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Excited to try these

My mother brought me these, and I can't wait to try them. I always love it when I get to try a new product. Fingerscrossed they are any good.

u/Empty_Ad_9455 — 14 days ago

I have this problem where I put way too much weight on details in my books. It probably makes for a cool reading experience, but it is really annoying the moment I try to patch a mistake. Anytime I change a line that I think won't matter, I suddenly find out it's referenced a few chapters later and causes a big plothole.

For example, a while ago I decided that the name of a god in my book should be revealed earlier. Originally I waited for the big moment to do so, but not in an epic-reveal way. It was more of an 'Oh, this being actually has a name' moment. Which is lazy writing, and I know better.

So as I was translating, I found a nice place to namedrop this god earlier. Easy fix, right?

Sike. One of the most epic lines in the book relies on my character not knowing this being's name. Now this time it isn't too big of a problem. I can probably fix it with rewording a few things and moving a few lines. However, it annoys me that this isn't an uncommon occurrence. It happens multiple times in every single book I write.

I'm not sure if I'm just causing this by overcomplicating things or if my plot holes and writing errors are just a huge fan of Hydra.

Please tell me if anyone else struggles with this. If not, send help. I've got to be stopped, or the next time I patch a mistake, the solution might just tear reality itself.

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u/Empty_Ad_9455 — 17 days ago
▲ 9 r/wattpadbooks+1 crossposts

Description:
Naele has always ignored the will of the gods. Not by choice, but because no priest can decipher the life path marked on her skin. But they all agree on one thing: ignoring it means certain death. Naele is not planning on dying anytime soon though. She's far too busy for that. But as soldiers from a neighbouring country invade her small town, it's clear fate is catching up with her. Luckily Naele has a few more tricks up her sleeve.

This might be for you if you like:
-Dark fantasy
-Fascinating worldbuilding
-Dangerous gods
-High stakes
-Lots of shifting character dynamics with complicated motivations.
-A strong female lead that has no trouble lying, fighting and won't be suppressed.

Everything else you need to know:
-Ongoing, but with weekly updates.
-This book is for a mature audience only.
-You're awesome for reading this post.

Read my story here, or at my profile shadowstander.

u/Empty_Ad_9455 — 11 days ago
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Hello everyone, I struggle to commit to long stories at the moment, so I'm looking for some really short ones. Think 10k words or less.

Bonus points if it:

-is thriller, horror, fantasy or science fiction (but I'm fine with other things)

-has an interesting psychological conflict

-is underrated

I'm not in the mood for:

-Smut, excessive swearing and suicide/self-harm scenes.

-Romance as the main plot

-Uncompleted stories

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u/Empty_Ad_9455 — 15 days ago