[Lyrics] Trade with my light by ASHIN
This is the first song I've ever written. I wrote these lyrics in about 10 minutes during an emotional moment. I'd love honest feedback on the lyrics, storytelling, and overall feeling. I'm trying to improve as a songwriter.
[Verse 1]
Lost in a thought
Still figuring out what I did wrong
Too many thoughts can't control alone
Hope you would be here
I'm sorry I was wrong
But still can't figure out what I did wrong
[Chorus]
It's so dark in here
But everyone's eyes it brought daylight
Trapped in a room
It's so dark in here..
But everyone's eyes it brought daylight
[Verse 2]
Heart hold the pain
Mind know the cure
Battle begins again heart wins the game
Cure can't get but it's only the cure
It's getting darker and darker
But everyone's eyes it's still daylight
[Bridge]
I tried harder and harder to be my best for him it wasn't good
In the end trade with my light
So I'm now trapped in darker room
[Outro]
It's so dark in here
It's so dark in here
But everyone's eyes it brought daylight