u/Purple_Pines

Title: Everything Must Go

Format: Feature Film

Page Length: 84 pages

Genre: Horror/Comedy

Logline: On the last day before a meteor ends all life on Earth, a young couple spends the day at a dinner party where they don’t know what or who could be on the menu.

Feedback concerns:

-How does the tone read throughout? I’m not sure if I’m striking the balance I want between the comedy and horror

-Are the stakes high enough? This ties into the tone question, but I worry if the comedic elements distract from the tension that could or should be in some of the scenes, even if they are intended to be comedic. Particularly pages 31-38. This scene is meant to be comedic but is also a big turning point in the plot.

-pages 20-28: this scene feels long and wordy and I’m not sure if it reads, would love feedback here.

-do the characters’ motivations read? Is the protagonist clear? Does it feel like their arc is clear?

-is the ending working? The pacing of the final act (pages 67-end) I feel like seems almost too fast, but also maybe not high enough stakes? I’m not sure.

Many thanks to anyone who takes time to provide feedback, it means a lot to me. Here’s the link to the script:

FULL PDF SCRIPT

The only thing I ever wanted when I was growing up was to move to NYC. So in my early 20s I made it happen and moved there! Unfortunately due to personal life things I ended up having to move back across the country, and now that I’m in my 30s and in a stable “well paying” (by west coast standards) career, I thought about moving back in the next couple of years and JEEZ the cost has skyrocketed?!

When I lived here before I paid 800 dollars a month in rent for a room. I made 20 bucks an hour at the time and it was doable. Nowadays from looking at things it seems like you’d be lucky to pay less than DOUBLE that for a room, even in farther neighborhoods in outer boroughs. Right now I’m making <4k a month and this is a pretty comfortable amount of money to make in my state, where I can even save money every month. But in NYC it seems like I couldn’t even get on a lease with that pay these days. I understand that jobs tend to pay a little more there, but with my specific line of work (doing hair) there’s also a period of building up clientele in a new place that adds a unique challenge. What are people doing to make ends meet? A lot of people must be working multiple jobs, cause even if your rent was 1500 a month you’d need to make 60k to get a room. That’s nuts!

Anyway I’m sure I sound like an old man yelling at clouds, I know inflation is bad, and cost of everything has gone up dramatically the last few years, and this is the most desirable city in the US so of course prices will be higher because of competition but I genuinely went from thinking “I’d love to move back there” to not seeing how it’s even possible.

Someone side swiped my car and broke off the drivers side rear view mirror, and for a while I just duct taped the mirror back on, and then I ordered the new mirror. Today I decided to finally install it and I do not have the bolt that goes through the center to attach the mirror (the 10mm hex head one to be specific). I only have the T20 screw at the front of the assembly keeping it attached right now and it’s definitely very loose.

Here’s my problem: how on earth do I replace this bolt? I see lots of threads on forums online of people saying “MAKE SURE YOU DONT LOSE THE BOLT” and I see people saying “I lost the bolt it fell onto the door frame”, but I cannot find anyone who is saying what their solution was. I tried to go to some hardware stores and none of the bolts were really at all close to the correct one, and I also tried going onto the ford part website but to be quite honest I had no idea what I was looking at and couldn’t find what I was looking for.

Hey yall! I’m about to start a job doing booth rent for the first time and wanted to know what things I should do/what you did/what you WISH you did when starting out?

Right now I know I need to set up a booking site of some sort, and figure out a way to take card payments (I think square can do both of these? Is there a better platform than square?)

In terms of product the salon provides back bar, but I’m back and forth on how much stuff of my own I should get/bring? Would love insight on that.

Do I need to be an LLC? Or is it fine to just be me and do taxes that way?

I know I need to put away about 30 percent of my pay for taxes

And… that’s about it I think? But I’d just love more insights and details and things I might not think about!