Image 1 — Need feedback, Philip re-design
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Need feedback, Philip re-design

This is Philip, he is a 17 year old part time barista high on his product and an ametour supernatural investigator.

I have been unsatisfied with his current design for a while now, for reasons that I could never just put to words. (Maybe I just fucked up the art idk)

The "redesgin" is mostly just removing the coat and the hat entierly, making his hair extra bird nest degree unstyled and add an actual bird, his pet Percy.

Uhh, idk what else to add. How else could I impruve his design?

u/The-Root-1971 — 8 days ago

Need help deciding, Half Demons

When a human and a demon or a witch loves eachother a lot... or things I do not wish to word between them happen... half demons are born.

Half Demons are humans that posses demonic powers and a higher magic ability from birth. Right now I have 3 diffirent ideas on how they coukd function, and need some toughts on which is the best.

#A)

Half Demons look like possesed humans (who share the traits of demons and human they posses) but they dont suffer the negative effects that come with their forms. While the sin they represent can affect their actions they have full control over their actions. They dont need to consume essence/soul to stay alive.

#B)

Half Demons look like regular humans majority of the time. However as their essence/soul starts to empty out their bodies will start to transform into a much more demonic form. To revert they need to consume essence/soul. Their minds are lucid but while transformed they will be affected more by sin they represent.

#C)

Half Demons have 2 bodies, a phisical human body and a demon body made from essence thats atached to the human body by the soul. The 2 bodies share one mind and soul. If one takes fatal damage both dies. They dont suffer from side effects of possesion, but sin they repserent could affect their actions.

Which sounds better, more intresting?

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u/The-Root-1971 — 17 days ago

How do I make Hannah's design better?

Hannah is first and foremost the Head of Personnel in the knockof SCP foundation, considered by many to be one of the pillars that keep the organization going. She is also a lich that exists in a spirit like state with her real body being in a comantose but unaging state, exept for her hair (picture 4)

I am not sure if her design is very good, at least in her regular state. I am not sure if I want to make her look too much like a steritypical skeletal lich, but idk I need more opinions I think.

u/The-Root-1971 — 20 days ago

"One Who Dwells in Limbo" (feedback on art welcomed)

New Hannah art, and a new fit for her thats meant to feel necromantic.

If you are wondering what those hands are, the crown was an artifact made to sever the body and soul and was crafted from a greed demon. Prolonged use has caused demons powers to aweken, however they are harmless as demon is no longer alive.

u/The-Root-1971 — 22 days ago

Cycle of Life & Soul

I made this in preperation to work on my undead. This is the basic cycle of every human soul.

  1. Essence is raw material of creation. Everything originates from it with Trinity's design.

  2. When born humans recive a certain amount of Life Energy, usually inherited by parent souls alongside essence. (This inheritence is why half demons are half demons.) Life energy headstarts all biological functions including the brain.

  3. Brain forms a mind, the mind grows with experiences and eventually these experiences turn to memories.

  4. Inherited essence gets formed to a soul, molded by memories. While brain is what forms new memories soul acts as a secondery storage of memories.

  5. After this point life energy starts clinging to the soul. If soul is removed life energy will slowly start to leave the body. This process takes around 20 years.

  6. Uppon death soul gets removed from the body, gets brought to the afterlife where memories slowly die untill only the raw essence remians.

Life often (but not always) ends after soul is removed. Energy gets lost to universal entrophy untill nothing remains.

u/The-Root-1971 — 22 days ago
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How does she look?

This is Iyu, an envy demon.

Her art is still a wip, so I want to ask before I am fully done with her if she looks good, if you would change anything.

u/The-Root-1971 — 27 days ago

I once again ask for feedback knowing I wont get any.

"Oh wow this again" yes this again. Luctus, deadly sin of gloom. Something is fundementally wrong with this design to the point I cant get people to respond in a comunity interaction with her or get people to provide feedback for her and I font know what so I cant fix it.

Is this even a feedback post at this point... I feel like I am just ranting. Ah whatever, if ı get feedback for her from this I will be glad I guess.

u/The-Root-1971 — 28 days ago

Bio of Eva

I wasnt actaully planing to post this untill I drawn her myself but I actually did wrote her backstory so why wait? This is the link to the Picrew I used for her: https://picrew.me/en/image\_maker/707090

Name: Eva Gardener

Age: 17

Pronouns: She/Her

Backstory: Eva is a single child of a single father who was always very hard working. So much so that Eva hardly saw him for a large period of her childhood as he worked for the sake of her future. Eva never knew her mother, she cant remember her ever being there. And she seemingly lack an extended family, as whenever she asked her father he avoided the question.

Eva is very into gardening and the church due to the influence of her father, who also loved to tend to the garden outside their apartment building and tought her to pray , despite him going out of his way to avoid the church building.

Eva has grown very resentfull over her father absence over time, yet knowing he was working himself to an early grave *because* of her she never let him know that, instead unleashing her frustrations on everyone else, verbally and sometimes even phisicly lashing out at children around her age which gave her the reputation of a bully. Only one who she didnt lash out at was her best and only friend Philip, who was just as bad as her. They saw eachother as siblings and soon Eva became rather possesive of Philip, as she started to be afraid that he too would leave her.

Eva has managed to keep up the apearence of a decent member of the comunity, despite still carrying many of the tendencies she had back when she was at middle school. She often the way most people percive her and her "honesty" to keep taking her frusturations out on others.

u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

DUA Mindscape Research Project

>User: Admin-3::Cineres_P

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DUA Mindscape Research Project

Project details:

Research is conducted by 3 elite psychological researchers lead by Head Researcher Prof. I. Sui.

With the use of a compliant Sloth Demon and a mixture of drugs the researchers enter a temporary lucid coma state. They are able to explore the larger mindscape thro this process.

DUA Mindscape Research//Log 001

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"Mindscape is the ocean of minds, a flod that every man, woman and children are a part of. But where does the water come from, what secrets remain in the depths of minds? Thats the questions I and my carefully chosen comrades will answer.

Do not ask how the demon we come to call..."Fluffball" agreed to be a part of this. The hypnosis their kind could provide was crutial to test my hypothesises. Putting us to sleep will feed it, its a win win.

May our venture help humanity not to survive, but to thrive. As we come to understand our selves humanity shall overcome their illnesses that turned our heaven to hell."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 003

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"Despite teams best efforts we remain locked in the zone we call the Lucid layer, the phisical world reflected near perfectly thro eyes of man. Its easily altered in small ways thro simple wishing, without any drawbacks. Admitidly the team was having too much fun experimenting to actually look for a way to reach deeper. We hope to reach to the next layer of Mindscape soon."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 024

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"At last we were able to escape the Lucid layer, and enter into the "Dreamland". Where reality as we know it is dialuted to the point of unrecognizeablity. Where mind ventures to in their sleep, under regular circumstances that is.

Dreamland is as reactive as Lucid to the presence of us, not being bound by laws of phisics makes the changes far more seveare. Before we could go deeper we had to wake up."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 037

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"As we spend time in the Dreamland, members of the team started to report something wierd. I wasnt sure what to make of it before I too started to experience it.

A voice, female sounding, suddenly speaking out of thin air. The words were quiet. I barely realized there were words but now that I did, I cant unhear her. Even at the off time in awake world. Team will take a break to see if the auditory halusinations will go away."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 079

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"I was happy to find out how one sinks deeper than the Dreamland but... there is not much we can say about area we called The Depths.

Depths of mind hold things forgotten to mankind, and while thanks to the anti-amnesiac drugs we can recall what we see, we dont have any idea what these things are. We cant really describe them eighter, our languages lack words for these."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 154

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"I think I saw an eye in the depths. Just for a moment, right in the corner of my vision. I guess its only wierd because, the depths lack any such normal things but... the feeling I have been getting watched has been... was this even worth a log?"

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 273

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"The Abyss of mind... the foundation uppon all of mankinds minds were built. The collective subcountiosness theory was true after all.

All these mythological beings and symbols... manifested right in front of our eyes. So far, I have seen way more dicks then I was expecting.

This has to be the final layer, I can feel it in my gut. Our expeditions will soon end, I cant belive it has already been 4 years since I wrote that first log."

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DUA Mindscape Research//Log 581

Writer: Prof.I.Sui

"Today we will try to go deeper thro the chasm we found last sesion. I am genuently not certain what could lie beneeth this layer, didnt we already reached the foundation of human countiousness? Time we find out, what lies underneet the human minds! I think our research is finally at its end point."

DUA Mindscape Research//Log 582

Writer: _______

"They saw her shadow thro the weil, and with curiosity as their eternal flame the fleeing perception was enough to poke a hole in the chains of her. Dont you hear the trumpets of heaven? Dont you see the truth of the world? Enlightment has reached humanity! Do not wory, nigh it will open your eyes too! What has begun cannot be stoped, cannot be delayed anymore."

Triger warning, self harm

DUA//Research and Containment Department//Incident Report//No:1327

Incident Participants: The Mindscape Research Team

Incident Type: Mass Suicide

Incident Details: Contact with members of the Mindscape Research Team was lost after their last sesion going into the "Abyss of Mind". Aproximately 10 minutes afterwards 4 gunshot sounds were heard from their clasified research station. Guards found the researchers sitting in a circle, each with a hole in their head. A standard self defence pistol was in the hand of Prof. I. Sui. No signs of force or strugle was found. Several letters were found in the middle of the room, the contents of these letters has been clasified by Director P. Cineres.

The demon that was used for the Mindscape research has refused to talk or eat, eventually withering away into nothingness.

Because of this incident all research on Mindscape has been stopped for the forseeable future.

Report over.

> Do you wish to delete selected objects?

> 584 files erased.

> logoff

"To Philip, my dear student and colege,

I am sory for the trouble we are about to cause to you but please understand our decicion isn't one we made easily. None of us want to die. Nobody ever wants to die, not like this. But we all saw and now we... no, I cant explain, it would doom you too.

We fucked up, I was so curious about what was in the shadows of out mind that I never once tought why it remained outside of our cognition. We know now, and we must not let others know, despite...

Deae Fledgling, despite howt might sound you must do what I say in this letter to the letter. Erase our research. Burn this letter. Burry my memory if you must. It wont stop her, but maybe this will delay.

Goodbye, Fledgling. I am sory ı wont be able to come for coffee like we planned. Tell little Sera I said hi.

Issac."

u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

How would you design a fungal succubus?

Oh wow demon help post no 500.000.000.000.000,000

In my world lust demons have a mushroom like apearence. Picture one is the Deadly Sin of Lust, picture 2 is a regular lust demon.

I want to create a fungal succubus similar to them but I am kinda out of ideas so any is apiritiated. I will answer if you have questions.

u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

Taste of Souls

"You might have realized by now that human souls varry a lot in color and flavor, but what you might not have realized is that these factors are both tied to one aspect of them, their sins. This book will act as a guide on what you could expect from your meals, and even how you could manuplate and torture humans to give the flavor you desire.

  1. Volumes

The volume of a flavor is dependant on how sinful that person was. A minor sin will give a minor taste, a major will give a lot of it. However just because its more potent it doesnt mean it tastes better, not the sins will go well together.

  1. Gluttony, Acidity

To start with the aspect I am most familiar with, Gluttony gives the soul less a taste but more a feel, the acidity. Like the fizzing of a soda, or a burning sensation that is not quite like spice.

  1. Greed, Sweetness

Greed gives a sweet sentation to the soul, so much so that you will probably become hungrier after the meal. Thats greed, beaconing you to have more and more.

  1. Lust, Umami

Lust gives the soul a savory, flesh like sensation. It also causes the sensation to consume the soul more like biting off flesh.

  1. Wrath, Spice

Wrath causes soul to be spicy. While I find the agony I feel in my mouth because of it unbearable, it is beloved by a lot of demons.

  1. Gloom, Salty

Gloom gives a salty sentation to the soul. Like shed teardrops its often light in taste, but it becomes quickly overwhelming before you even realize.

  1. Envy, Bitter

Envy culminating causes soul to become progresively more bitter. The resentfull taste is better at lower doses.

  1. Sloth, Alcholic

Sloth gives a warm, intoxicating sensation to the soul, with some after effects that cause nausia. Its not difirent from the drunkness a human feel after drinking alchol.

  1. Pride, Sour

Pride often sours the soul. Ew.

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[Rest of this book has been locked away via magic untill you buy the Recipie DLC. With love and respect, Avarice Publishing]

u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

Follow up post, are these good symbols for my Trinity of Creation?

A follow up to my last post, these are meant to be the symbols used to represent the gods by the general public.

Jester is a Jester (no shit), the Root is a Tree and the Architect is a machine.

u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

How do I come up with fake religious symbols?

I will try to be brieff, I am working on my settings religion and I need to create some religious symbols that wont step on any real religions shoes.

For more details, my religion focuses on a trinity of gods; a tree, a jester and a computer. I think it sounds like a joke set up when put like this but I am dead serious. The tree called The Root is the origin of life, the jester called The Jester (yes I was very creative while naming) is an agent of free will , the computer called the Architect is an agent of order.

Idk, maybe if you worked on something similar before you can help, and if you do thank you. And if you dont also thank you just because.

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u/The-Root-1971 — 1 month ago

Late-Stage Witches

While there are many ways to obtain magic, becoming a witch is the worst option as it requiers you to allow a demon into your soul.

No matter how harmless demons try to be (which most dont bother with) they are still parasitic. They will start to gain power from your soul, most will devour it whole and leave for the next sucker.

But in the rare case they dont and the 2 are trully compatible, the boundry between human and demon will start to blend together. Causing demon to grow phisical form tied to the witch and witch to start losing their identity. Their powers will grow largely.

Anyways I drawn this overly messy and hard to get what you are looking at version of my oc and wanted to share it.

u/The-Root-1971 — 2 months ago
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I am no longer happy with Philip's design but I am not sure why exactly. How could I impruve him?

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u/The-Root-1971 — 2 months ago

Toughts on updated Architect design?

The Architect is a part of the Trinity of Creation. He alone was responsible for creation of machines, but after growing an identity of his own he was banished out of the universe out of fear that he would create machines for his own gain instead. Form he have now is a rather crude recreation of his former structure.

He is responisble for maintaining the fundemental laws of the universe, controling and regulating every aspect of reality. Only things that can alter his enforcements are magic of other 2 members of the Trinity.

Did I impruve his design? What else could be done better?

u/The-Root-1971 — 2 months ago

The Gravitional Anomaly Zone

DUA Field Research Record// Gravitional Anomaly Zone//001

Director P. Cineres:

"This place was founded during a scouting trip going towards the western edges of the Blighted Zone. Noticing the irregular formation of what at the time was tought to be mountains we send out the storks to scout the area for us. [Editing note: yes I am talking about the birds, why does everyone think stork is some code name?]

Uppon their return we learned that the area was a series of islands suspended midair.

Due to the nature of this anomaly I will conduct this expetion solo as I am the only person able to travel vertically in the department without needing a wall."

DUA Field Research Record//Gravitional Anomaly Zone//002

Director P. Cineres:

"I have managed to set up a camp at the edge of the annomaly. This place is... rather calming after the last few zones, if you dont mind the oxygen deficency that is. Sky islands are spread out in a large zone. Islands seem to be slowly moving in a loose circle, around what I dont know.

While I am joking about it, the air stiation is really wierd. Despite not being in a high altitude yet (the curent camp is at 500 meters above ocean level) the oxygen levels are at half of what they should be. I might have to cut the expadition off early if the canisters go low before I planed."

DUA Field Research Record//Gravitional Anomaly Zone//003

Director P. Cineres:

"Going further into the anomaly. What I noticed is, there is no life at all here. Sure, animals are usually not in places like this but there is usually vegitation. I have not seen a single blade of grass or moss or algae. Maybe its the air that is the isue because its not the water...

Water is flowing backwards. From the ocean waterfalls (water-rises?) flow to these islands, creating ponds and rivers. And I have confirmed that this water is just as drinkable as ocean water, not at all. Too much salt, needs to be purified.

Camp altitude, 2500~3000 meters. Stocks are still enough for a while. Going deeper."

DUA Field Research Record//Gravitional Anomaly Zone//004

Director P. Cineres:

"Fast update, I was getting closer to the core of the anomaly and...I found remaints. Really old human remaints, they seem to be a few centuries old. Not just one or two corpses, there were houses and towers torn to pieces across many islands.

Not just one of these eighter. Closer I get to the core of this anomally more frequent these shatered towns become. It almost feels delibaret.

This anomally, this calamity might have been another result of the Great War. ...perhaps I shouldnt keep going at all."

DUA Field Research Record//Gravitional Anomaly Zone//005

Director P. Cineres:

"I have reached the core, or the closest I can get to it. Untill here each island had a small gravity of their own but I can feel the pull of whatever is the cause of the anomaly is from kilometers away.

The origin point has formed a sphere around itself at ocean level. The core is pulling in more and more things from around itself into the sphere. The area around the core is entierly devoid... its like everything not tied to the ground got consumed by it, then it started to bite off the ground too. I think If I got any closer I would be consumed by it too.

This is the end of the expadition. I am running out of recources rapidly and honestly... I missed my family. Cineres out."

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u/The-Root-1971 — 2 months ago

Rains of Ash

Eons ago, world was habited by humans and countless other species. It was the age of magic, as the arcanic information spreaded through the world, advancements in both science and magic kept pushing mankind towards the future.

This greatness were never going to last. As humanity advanced so did their paranoiya. The governing bodies of the humanity started to create weapons to anihilate others, before they did the same to them.

One captured and harvested the might of the Pheonix, harnessing a flame that burned with the power of sun.

One made a deal with the most violent demon, forging a gem that could turn anyone into an invincible beast hell bent on slaughtering.

One in colabiration with the leading medical researcher created a bioweapon that could deform and kill from the inside.

One advanced in the field of gravity, forming miniture black holes.

One turned to the power of the atom, finding how to split it to destructive might.

Wars began between them. Fueled by greed and fear, but non used their decicive weapons.

Magical creatures feared what man was doing. Before it was too late they began to migrate into other realms, mainly Feywild as its is closest to earth.

Not untill one faithfull day when the Pehonix atempted to escape its chains. The resulting fight resulted in the Solar Flame to become unstable; exploding and turning anything in close proximity to gas, and rest of the goverment to ash.

The temparetures risen, flods starting, radio transmitions broken, people afraid. They didnt hesitate to turn on eachother, all shots were fired.

97% of earth become unhabitable under 30 minutes. Then the rain started, gray water flowing from the sunless skies bringing more death and illness to the suffering few that remained.

Sun didnt rose for months. Clouds remained dark for years. Life itself abandoned the earth for centuries. Survivors only did thanks to divine intervention and even that wasnt enough for many.

Only eons after the world started to look like how it did before the Great War and the Rains of Ash.

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u/The-Root-1971 — 2 months ago