u/Vlad_Iz_Love

Notice nyo every time kung baskog ang ulan pirme gina baha ang SM sa reclamation? na biskan pila na ka drainage na gina kut2x ga baha gid?

Yes, always barado ang aton drainage tungod sa basura kg bsikan anv Mambuloc Creek indi na kaya pero ang rason gd na pirme gina baha ang reclamation is geography.

Unlike sa SM MOA sa Manila or SM Seaside sa Cebu na reclaimed land man, nubo ang aton reclamation. Kung halin ka sa plaza, manaog ka gid para makakadto sa SM kay may downward slope. If may ulan, naturally manaog gd ang tubig so tanan na tubig halin sa babaw (plaza) manaog gd na sa SM

and even sang wala pa ang SM, sang puro pa na cogon ang reclamation ga baha gd na ya. I dont know ngaa dira gd nag tukod ang SM and although strategic ang location kay ara sa center pero indi gd siya nami kay pirme ginabaha

May problema man sa plumbing especially kung may baha kay wala labot sa barado, ga balik pa ang tubig halin sa toilet

Also shoutour sa SNR kay aware sila na pirme da ginabaha hence ara sa babaw ila warehouse

Feel free to comment if may sala sa akon analysis (or grammer since I mixed Hiligaynon and English kag wala ko ga gamit AI para ma sulat ni)

Prose written by LLMs often uses a lot of typical sensory details and purple prose. Before, it was all about the em-dashes, but when LLMs like ChatGPT started to ditch the em-dashes, there were other factors that are considered AI factors. One of them is the use of sensory details like 'The Smell of Ozone' and other sensory words like the smell of diesel (for industrial locations or the smell of spices (if the setting is in South Asia). There's also the purple prose and the use of figures of speech.

While human writers used them for a long time and this is where LLMs are trained, LLMs can't use the right figures of speech; hence, in some prose, the figures used don't match the story.

So I decided to make prompts that stripped the scent sensory terms, limited or sometimes stripped the purple prose, and avoided the word SMELL OF OZONE.

I only learned of the word Smell of Ozone because of LLMs; before, I only learned it from science or anything related to Oxygen. At first, I just tolerated them because they sound cool, especially with sci-fi settings, but over time, I started to remove them entirely, even placing a ban on the word OZONE in my prompts

Here's the comparison of both works. One has the usual Purple Prose, sensory details, and other AI factors, while the next one is the revised version. I also tend to focus more on visuals and less on scent for my writing. Feel free to comment and suggest if this approach of stripping the Purple Prose and the Sensory Details is better

The Prompts I Used (this is applied to my projects in ChatGPT and Claude), and for this one, I used ChatGPT

Prompt

Edit this according to the Project Instructions.

No resolutions at the end, do not begin the story with a single sentence but with a paragraph

Edit in the style of a novel; make it novelistic for novels. with drama, depth, and emotions, with dialogue

Use either the Rule of One or the Rule of Two. Avoid the Rule of Three

no rule of threes, unnecessary metaphors and figures of speech that are not connected

“Write this in a natural, human way. Keep it conversational and easy to follow. Avoid overly technical words or formal phrasing. Make it sound like how someone would actually say it out loud.”

Add commas and punctuation marks. Absolutely no use of Anaophora, and do not use the rule of three, use dense literary prose with dialogue spacing to make it readable, balance the dialogue and the prose description, no scent of smells

Show the age of the characters only if added in the draft. Use controlled legato prose. Let the narration connect actions, motives, and consequences in full sentences, using conjunctions such as because, since, while, and although. Avoid isolated physical beats unless they reveal power, hesitation, or strategy. Dialogue should sound natural and complete, not clipped or theatrical.

Write in controlled procedural prose with legato movement. The narration should carry pressure through connected sentences, not through clipped beats.

Avoid one-line physical gestures, repeated pauses, and fragments. Dialogue should be natural, guarded, and complete because the characters are protecting their positions rather than performing dramatic lines.

Use controlled procedural prose in writing, not the beat-driven micro-prose or staccato beat prose. Avoid writing clipped rhythm sections and write in more connected legato prose. Use two beats written using logical conjunctions, and add unique physical movements without stating their habits.

DO NOT write scents or scent details. Instead, rely on visuals and add more visuals for the readers.

Do not mention their ages unless stated, and avoid the word ‘ozone’ and the use of scents in every description.

Avoid abstract adjectives. Describe the setting using only kinesthetic and auditory details.”

The First One:

The air in Ångermanland was electric, heavy with the scent of ozone as the storm raged above. Thunder rolled across the skies, a deep, rumbling growl that seemed to shake the very earth. Lightning crackled, striking down with furious precision, igniting the night in brilliant flashes of light. But this was no ordinary storm. It wasn’t nature’s fury that ravaged the small village below—it was something far more deliberate, far more terrifying.

The village had been reduced to rubble, its houses struck by relentless bolts of lightning, each flash leaving behind scorched earth and smoking wreckage. Cars were twisted heaps of metal, their frames melted and shattered. Trees stood like charred skeletons, blackened by the intensity of the storm. In the aftermath, the village looked like the victim of some cruel god’s wrath.

Yet no one had died. Not a single person had been harmed.

The Second One:

The storm crossed Ångermanland with a discipline no winter weather should have had, because the lightning did not roam across the valley the way a real storm would. It descended where the instruments had marked streets, roofs, and junction boxes below, one strike following another with enough spacing to be counted and enough force to flatten whatever it touched.

From the ridge, the mock village looked complete for only a few seconds at a time. Then a roof opened along its spine and folded inward. Then a garage door blew loose and skidded across the road. Then the transformer yard flashed white, and the whole square dropped into a darkness broken only by the next bolt coming down through it.

Cars parked along the central road took the strikes badly. Their windows burst first, then the bodies sagged under the heat, and the rain ran over warped metal in quick silver lines. By the time the thunder began to separate into longer intervals, the village no longer looked like a model built for observation. It looked like a town after a strike sequence.

Edit: Not Rule of Three but Rule of Two

I had this what if like what if you can go back in time with your present mind, that means like your adult self but youre in the body of your past self parang sa Xmen Days of Future Past

So yeah I made a crazy self challenge for myself. I had this bold plan to listen to every Filipino Music I can find from the past to the present and its wild as hell. Took me years to research and download every music. From the Precolonial music (mostly indigenous songs from various ethnic groups) to Spanish Rondallas and Folk Music like Carinosa ans Sarong Banggi to Kundimans, Manila Sound, OPM, Pinoy Rap and even commercial jingles because why not haha

Before I started this last 2023 and it took me 6 months from 1500 to 2023 and now I started last February and as of now Im still in 1994

Well its not all because if its ALL Filipino music it would take me years to finish

Btw I play this on my car so its my car music on my daily commute.

Will update if youre all interested to know