u/manvsmirror

Hi would love to get some feedback back on my lyrics. They are in a song format so bear that in mind.

**GOODNIGHT MOON**
**Verse 1**
A safe voice by my pillow
Gave the dark a gentle lie
My shout was like an echo
Buried beneath the sadness
I thought that you were smiling
I thought you’d always be my friend
I pointed little fingers
My warmth carried in your rays
**Chorus**
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
**Verse 2**
The path was my own
My hands held the light
The pain was measured
A distance open wide
I thought you were endless
I thought that you knew
I shrugged my acceptance
I deciphered your clues
**Chorus**
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
**Verse 3**
The frame gets closer
My body hears the bell
I term the surrender
I rage what it spelled
I knew that you heard me
I knew that we lied
My sins cannot haunt me
My kindness bare aside
**Chorus**
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
**Outro**
I wanted it different
I wanted to hold
The mind feels elastic
It rips and it folds
My stare runs backwards
It fills out the pain
I kiss one last time, goodnight moon

Hi would love to get some feedback back on my lyrics. They are in a song format so bear that in mind.

GOODNIGHT MOON
Verse 1
A safe voice by my pillow
Gave the dark a gentle lie
My shout was like an echo
Buried beneath the sadness
I thought that you were smiling
I thought you’d always be my friend
I pointed little fingers
My warmth carried in your rays
Chorus
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
Verse 2
The path was my own
My hands held the light
The pain was measured
A distance open wide
I thought you were endless
I thought that you knew
I shrugged my acceptance
I deciphered your clues
Chorus
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
Verse 3
The frame gets closer
My body hears the bell
I term the surrender
I rage what it spelled
I knew that you heard me
I knew that we lied
My sins cannot haunt me
My kindness bare aside
Chorus
I longed in your brightness
I existed in your dark
The ride was boundless
The innocence drowned
Outro
I wanted it different
I wanted to hold
The mind feels elastic
It rips and it folds
My stare runs backwards
It fills out the pain
I kiss one last time, goodnight moon

Almost afraid to post this here because of the negativity around AI. I love music, but I’m not a musician. I wanted to write lyrics and hear them turned into songs that sound somewhere in the neighborhood of my favorite bands, Pink Floyd and Radiohead. I know I’m not going to achieve that 😊, but I’d still love to get some honest feedback.
I understand any criticism about the music being AI-generated, and I respect it. I’m not doing this to make money. I’m just doing it because I enjoy writing and creating something I can listen to.
Would love to hear what you think.