u/roarofthecrowd

Hello,

I got a very lovely, very lengthy personalized rejection on a full today and I wanted to thank the agent for sending the feedback. When I go on QueryTracker though it doesn't allow me to send any messages as the "query has been finalized"

Would it be weird to send an email to this agent thanking them, as we've only communicated through QT ?

Also, the agent mentioned if I made some significant changes to the manuscript later on then I would be welcome to send it her way again. She also mentioned sending whatever I write next.

I'm just not sure what the etiquette is on this one...

My third attempt at this one...Thank you for all your help so far! It's been very eye opening.

Dear Agent,

Starving health and wellness influencer, Nova Santos, will do whatever it takes to cook up sponsors and cement her status in the influencer industry. After witnessing a kidnapping at the hands of Kindred Harvest’s own VP of Marketing, the biggest and most profitable grocery store chain in the country, Nova leverages what she saw to her advantage. In exchange for her silence, she lands a delicious brand deal and an exclusive shoot inside the company’s flagship store.

But once she’s inside, she notices something isn’t right. The store is void of customers, employees, and most disturbingly—she can’t get out. Then she finds the others: five strangers, including Leon, the man she saw kidnapped and searching for his friend, all trapped inside with ties to Kindred Harvest. As a shifting darkness with teeth begins eating them one by one, erasing them so completely it’s as if they never existed, Nova and Leon grow close as they uncover Kindred Harvest has been sending people to their deaths for decades. Their connection grows deeper as they search for a way out, but Nova knows it’s built on a lie. She didn’t just witness his abduction, she used it. And when the truth surfaces, it may cost her the only person she has left.

As the darkness closes in, Nova and Leon realize the store feeds on deprivation. And the more they cling to control, the worse it becomes. To escape, Nova must finally confront the hunger she’s spent years denying, Leon must accept the guilt of his friend’s fate, and the two of them will have to willingly crawl through the belly of what’s hunting them.      

Complete at 90,000 words, EVERYTHING MUST GO will appeal to fans of Julie Chan Is Dead by Lianne Zhang for its exploration of influencer culture, and Hide by Kiersten White for its high-stakes survival horror. This story blends retail horror, haunted liminal spaces, and a slow-burn romance.

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