Battle writing practice
Hi Im a new writer, this is a little piece I’ve written, please tell me what you think.
Theodore hurriedly rushed through the white halls,an alarm blaring in his ears, a deep gash above his eyebrow was leaking blood all over his face, and his right arm hung limply by his side.
He grabbed one of the Pokeballs of his belt, releasing a bloodied up Empoleon. “This isn’t looking to good for us Emp, you’re the only one remaining, everyone else is too injured to fight. We got to make it out of here fast”. Empoleon only nodded in understanding, beginning to walk next to his trainer.
While the two were making their way to the exit, suddenly from behind a corner came out a bloodied purple haired woman, in a team galactic uniform. Next to the woman were a large mean looking Purugly, and a Crobat.
“Mars?!, how in the fuck are you here? You’re supposed to still be in prison”.
“Does that really matter honey? The only important thing is that Im here, and you are going down”. “Purugly, Crobat kill him”
At that commend both cat and bat leapt forward with a battle cry, using slash and cross poison respectively.
Yet they were both thwarted by Empoleon using steel wing to knock them away.
Empoleon followed up on that strike by unleashing an ice beam at Crobat, which the bat Pokemon quickly dodged, and countered with a shadow ball that was deflected by Empoleon’s steel wing.
Purugly didn’t stay idol and charged Empoleon with an iron tail that hit him in the back, and got a grunt of pain out of the emperor Pokemon. Empoleon even in pain quickly turned around to blast Purugly with a hydro pump that sent smashing through a wall.
“Protect” came Theodore’s call, and Empoleon obeyed without a second thought, causing a leech lifing Crobat to slam into a shimmering green barrier. Crobat was left wide open for an ice beam that sent him flying and frozen, to slam into the sealing.
Just as Empoleon was getting ready to finish of Crobat, he was sent smashing into one of the walls by a double edging Purugly. Empoleon quickly attempted to counter with a steel wing but was interrupted by an air slash from Crobat, who had successfully broken out of the ice during that exchange.
“We don’t have much time before her reinforcements arrive, Empoleon we’ve got to finish this fast”
Empoleon only grunted in understanding before exploding into movement, he unleashed a powerful surf forcing Purugly and Crobat to bunch around Mars to protect her, Empoleon than jumped in to his own surf using a combination of drill peck and wave crash to lunch himself forward at the trio. Purugly and Crobat used double edge and brave bird respectively to meet Empoleon’s assault.
For almost a full second the three Pokemon were in a stale mate that seemed as if it would last forever, until the pain from using wave crash caused torrent to activate. The boost from his ability allowed Empoleon to cut through his opponents like a hot knife through butter, slamming into his two opponents and launching their unconscious forms at their trainer, hitting her hard enough to knock her out two.
“Thanks Empoleon, let’s get out of here“ Empoleon simply nodded and began walking next to his trainer as they made their way out of the galactic hideout.
So what did you think? Is it good? Don’t be afraid to give criticism, Is the grammar fine? English is my second language so I’m not sure