Cl4wson - Mint Condition
This is a song I wrote last week. Curious to know what your take on it would be. So this post is a feedback request.
About the song; I'd been meaning for a while to write a song without a chorus, but with a refrain on the last line of each verse. And I had this nice chord progression and melody in my backlog of unfinished ideas (four phrases, minor key, ending on iv so it wants to resolve back to i) Then one day, while driving to work, it hit me what I should use as the refrain. Additional lyrical inspiration come from the movie How To Get Ahead In Advertising.
(About the video; this is nothing too specific, just some stock footage clips that accompany the music, because why not?)
Lyrics:
MINT CONDITION
Found a knot, back of the collar
Stood all day at the counter
Home at six, don't mention it to her
it was nothing, nothing at all
Two weeks on, still where I left it
Hear a voice. Long day, probably.
“Hey there handsome, did you miss me?”
This should be nothing. Nothing at all
This can’t be nothing. Nothing at all
On the train, crammed to the windows
Forehead pressed to the cold glass
“This is it. This is your whole life.
Sure aint nothing. Nothing at all.
It aint nothing. Nothing at all."
Electric hum, cracked bathroom mirror
Bolt the door, so no one sees
take the knife and check my reflection
What’s the worst that could happen to me
What’s the worst that could happen to me
Still go in, same as I always
Steady work. Could be worse, too.
“Never became a thing, or now did you?”
Don't worry 'bout it, it was nothing at all
Don't worry 'bout it, it was nothing at all
Looking back it took nothing at all
Looking back it took nothing at all