u/blakerdavison

Todd actually came on stage and claimed he’s never heard of Elder Scrolls at all.

None of these are legit, just concepts! But hey, Lucasfilm/Disney…if you see this 🤷🏻‍♂️

Edit: there seems to be some confusion. Yes, these are mocked up on tees, hoodies, etc. but these are NOT available anywhere. I’m also not trying to reinvent the wheel here. :) These are just some ideas for minimalistic “streetwear” Vader merch! I’m a professional graphic designer so this kinda what I do for fun!

And, of course…these are made with absolutely ZERO AI.

I understand this is a lot to read, so I apologize in that regard, but I’d love for some a helpful critique/feedback on the first chapter of my novel.

As I have there, this is an epic fantasy. It starts out as more of a “gangster” story, but the job/assignment mentioned at the end of the chapter is what will kickstart that more mythical/epic side of the story. I really want to tell a story of a man who causes a cosmic, mythical sin (primarily because of his gangster upbringing) and goes on an adventure to atone for his sin.

As of now, I’d love feedback on:

-Pacing and flow
-Dialogue (does it feel organic or more cliché?)
-Is there fluff that could be cut out?

Any and all help criticism/feedback would be appreciated. Again, sorry for the length!