u/Dangerous-Duck-3493

For context, my weakness is subtext and dialouge, and my strengths are my prose and visuals. So I've been practicing by watching movies, alongside with reading novels, then reading a decent script. So far I've completed reading 3 movie script (I've started doing this recently, and they're quite easy to read. You could binge them in a day. It takes an 1 hour or 2 to finish one) and on the fourth.

Since I'm a panster, I dont quite know why my main character lost his job. Could you tell from reading it? Does it feel force? Oh and for the record, it's a short piece I am wiritng for practice, not somehting I intend to keep going and making it into a full-fledged novel. Though, having some opinions would be wonderful. I really wanna get better at writing, and if you have any suggestions, I am all ears. Thank you.

For context, my weakness is subtext and dialouge, and my strengths are my prose and visuals. So I've been practicing by watching movies, alongside with reading novels, then reading a decent script. So far I've completed reading 3 movie script (I've started doing this recently, and they're quite easy to read. You could binge them in a day. It takes an 1 hour or 2 to finish one) and on the fourth.

Since I'm a panster, I dont quite know why my main character lost his job. Could you tell from reading it? Does it feel force? Oh and for the record, it's a short piece I am wiritng for practice, not somehting I intend to keep going and making it into a full-fledged novel. Though, having some opinions would be wonderful. I really wanna get better at writing, and if you have any suggestions, I am all ears. Thank you.

Original post got taken down ;)

But to put it precisely, I want to learn how to simplify parts of the face with shapss to shade better. Where is my anatomy off, and how can I place each features in their percise location? Thanks.

Im an aspiring teen artist. I started drawing realism recently (3months ago, once a week if I was lucky). Hope it doesnt look too amateurish ;)

I started drawing realism recently. Hope it doesnt look too amateurish ;)

I started drawing realism recently. Hope it doesnt look too amateurish ;)

This is the large portion and costs 8.50. Oh look at those curds.

Context

Our teacher told us to draw it so (1) she could make sure it wasn't AI and (2) she thought that it would be unfair for people who put the effort in drawing if she gave us the choice whether to or not.

We had to choose an act and scene from Twelfth Knight Shakespeare and modernize it. I chose act 1 scene 2, where the female MC (Viola) survived a sea wreckage, only to find out form a country man that he spotted her brother struggling against a mast and he most likely has drowned. After which he told her about the place where they both stood and about this Duke, and she decided to pretend to be an eunuch to work for him as she was a woman and finding a job in the 16th century when your sex wasn't male was impossible.

My one shot, located in modern day Japan, is similar because it has the same themes of deceit and tragedy.

I wrote the dialouge before drawing, because we were graded more based on the story than the art (our teacher did claim that she couldn't draw for her life so she wouldn't judge) so I tried to make the narration interesting, and it is flowery on purpose because I kind of wanted to imitated Shakespeare's language but make it easy for modern reader to understand.

Because we had to write about our comic and also make an edited voice over, I didn't have much time to perfect the art or make my hand writing clean; I drafted the panels but not speech bubbles. We also couldn't bring it home because it was a CPT (weighed as much as exam for marks), and because of that I had to take a picture and enhance it with my editing tool on my galary (Adobe made the whe thing look grainy so I ditched it.)

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