First chapters feedback
This year at Jackson High, there are a suspicious amount of new admissions. The son of a Sergeant at the Greenwood Village PD is observant to a fault. Why does the new girl not talk? Why does she live all alone in a mansion?
Why does the girl dream of a scythe wielding nobody? Why does she write him woeful letters in her sleep?
Who. Is. She.
This book is contemporary fiction. It's got a treasure hunt, found family trope, and yes, unwanted but rooted for romance. He has questions she won't answer. She has stories she can't tell. He's got an emotional range so wide it's going to give you a whiplash (I hope, hahah). She's a rock. Or maybe there's a reason she doesn't scream if you give her a thousand papercuts.
This book began as a fun thing but it's developed into a full blown 99k+ words novel. If you'd like, and have the time, I'd love a review. I'd like to know what's wrong with it and what's working.
Thank you!