FEEDBACK REQUEST: Screenplay for my first short film: 'The Method Actor' [Satire, Dark Comedy, Mockumentary.
Based on your recommendations, I just copyrighted my screenplay and also made the drive link public so that you guys can read it and provide feedback on the script.
I just completed my first ever screenplay and would love to get some honest feedback on it. I have written it as a pitch black, no holds bar absurdist comedy, which means it might be off-putting to some readers, but I was not sure if I should mark the whole post as NSFW. I know the names used seem on the nose and will change them if the feedback suggests that I should.
Also, since it is set in India, some of the dialogues use Hinglish(A localized blend of Hindi and English), which might alienate non-Hindi readers but even if you don't speak hindi, you will be able to grasp most of the context.
LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oPZgDDplKSXf3_LAxJK7w7yA6DhCAI9f/view?usp=drive_link
Title: The Method Actor
Format: Short Film
Pages: 26
Genre: Satire, Dark Comedy, Mockumentary, Absurdist Comedy
Language: Hinglish [Hindi+English]
Synopsis: A mockumentary retrospectively capturing the hijacking of a movie's production by a narcissistic method actor.
What I'm looking for:
Feedback on the overall structure of the screenplay.
Feedback on the name of the lead character(Is it too on the nose)
Feedback on the plotlines (I've tried to sum everything up, but if there are any plotholes do clarify)
I am against the use of AI in filmmaking or art forms, but I did use Grammarly to check and correct some of my grammatical/spelling errors, and I hope that does not affect the artistic integrity of my script.
Thanks for giving my script a shot hope you guys enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.