u/JustinGames59

Considering how peace Raster are it's low-key disrespectful.

I set everything up and it did work, but it stopped and idk why.

This is one of my character's back stories.
For example, this is how I did my intro paragraph

>The orange sky stretched as the sun sank below the horizon. The last light dragged long shadows down the hillside, turning the dry scrubland gold. The wind moved through the brush in no particular hurry. 

>It stepped out of the shadow, its brown coat almost blending with the evening light. Its head tilted up, gazing at the orange-white clouds as they drifted away to the horizon. A sound louder than thunder ripped through the valley, striking the deer. The deer lurched forward and ran, its silhouette swallowed by the shadow of the hills.
A small white light shined from a bush,

I was giving feedback like too wordy and what stepped out of the shadow.

My improvement

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The orange sky stretched as the sun sank below the horizon. The last light dragged long shadows down the hillside, turning the dry scrubland gold. The wind moved through the brush in no particular hurry. 

>The deer stepped out of the bushes, its brown coat almost blending with the evening light. A sound louder than thunder ripped through the valley, striking the deer. It lurched forward and ran, its silhouette swallowed by the shadow of the hills. 

>A small white light shined oddly from a bush, some distance away.
“Good shot, Mason.”

I think my problem is that I separate the setting from the characters or action, so I end up writing more than what is needed.

I think Mereliona would be a metal head. Not because she is aggressive. I think she would like faster past and louder music.

Some people there say, "Oh, it's a devil", but let's be for real. Which devil will start a relationship with a human when they treat other devils below them like garbage?

You have to look further into it, having a child is not a one-off thing and finding a woman who will just have one for you by her own will is hard to impossible, unless you are a top 10 manipulator.

Some people will say Lucius or Julius, but why?

Asta is the root cause of how Lucius was defeated, so that makes no sense.

And then again, this just proves my own theory to be correct.

Keep in mind that having a child with a woman is not something you get up to do on a boring Tuesday.

Asta's father is either a deadbeat or dead.

There is no living entity that can get close to Licita without having its magic drained, besides Libea or Asta.

So, unless the God of Black Clover pulled a virgin Mary, Lecita was 🍇or (This is a low ball) she was not aware of her powers and had a relationship with a guy.
look idk how else to think about it. She literally can't control her magic, the snake was drained instantly, and she lives in the bonies.

https://preview.redd.it/lru0jcuxbf1h1.png?width=772&format=png&auto=webp&s=13eb6b9072648b6c198a7c371e2b2fb3307b66af

Some people will tell me I have a kink. idk why this. Black Clover is dark. This is seareis is bilt on logic. (my opinion).

No hate.

Not gonna lie, might have fallen for the rage bait.

So, some time ago, I posted Should I make a CTOG JDF story and some guy commented he would co-write with me. I agreed, and I sent him every doc with full editing privileges.

Why, idk bc i'm stupid.

He did not respond after showing me his autobiography, so he is either dead or I got chopped.

Anyway, if you see a CTOG story named Blod and Ire (man, that was a good name), it was probably not written by me.

Well, he does not have my brain, and i confident I can write sm batter bc the story was in the early stage anyway.

From what I have seen, it looks like the more they use their magic, the better they get at it.

It also works with emotional strength, which is how Noelle got seadragons creadle i think idk her fisrt defence spell from ep 10.

hold on, I think it's like they have a grasp of and an idea of how it should work, and then they just practice it.

idk think of how you see Naymat do a rainbow flick and you go home and try to do it from memory, and you don't stop until you get it, or you study it and improve upon it.

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Idk, I think my first point makes more sense

I have read some books, and I find it annoying how the author explains or over-explains some stuff that I could have easily figured out.

I want to do a newspaper article out of context audio prologue for my Jamaican Special Forces story.

But I don't know how to do it.

Is it even possible because this sounds more like a visual medium than prose?
I might have to scrap it if you tell me I can't.

I am also new to Novel writing.

Ok, so I'm a Jamaican citizen, and my Hiper fixation is modern military.

The story would take place in 2026, in Jamaica, where crime has gone too far, and cartels are formed in the region.
To combat this, the prime minister, who is a woman, increases the military budget to 10 billion JMD for SOF Units CTOG/MACC.

With this, they bought 2  Bell 429M (Armed Variant)
So rockets and guns.
total cost = JMD $2.92B

as well as 2 Embraer A-29 Super Tucano

With guided and unguided bombs and 5 cals.

total cost = JMD $5.18B

They also bought more small-unit stuff
like NVGS, suppressor, etc.

So in all, the total for all stuff is JMD $8.31B
This was mats up by Claude and i so it could be incorrect.

Anyway, this will prob come out five years from now because I am writing my flagship passion project.

So let me know your thoughts.

I can't play it, and the BP needs to be completed

>!Ok so at first it felt rushed because there wasn't much build up. But the last chapter saved it from it especially with the cliff hanger. !<

>!Clearly the story is incomplete in a way.!<

>!Yes In the end Asta did complete his goal of ending the social injustice. !<

>!But we never got to see someone stuff like charmy past. !<

>!Umm more romance stuff in-between.!<

>!What happened to the devil's. !<

>!Etc!<

>!I find it funny how the 30 year olds Yami and Charlet are dating, but the 20 year olds Charmy and Funeral have kids. !<

>!But it seems like evil strikes again as we see new enemies at the end, but they don't look like they're from this region. !<

>!But anyways I think tabata will continue the series especially when the anime dose good. !<

>!Let's hope that the anime can fixed some time Skip jumps I don't like the fact we moved from 6 months to 2 years. !<

>!Anyways this is all over the place I'm Will be surprised if anyone understands this. !<

>!What are your thoughts 💬?!<