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Writing a script for college and need feedback desperately

I know it isn’t formatted properly but it’s 5am and I really can’t be bothered to format right now…

Deliberately leaving context out because i’d like to know these things:
- what you can gather right off the bat
- what impressions you get about either character (or both)
- what impressions you get from their dynamic
- any other pieces of feedback / critique

This is the very first beta write up so it isn’t great, it contains scene 1 and 2. It’s just my raw first write up with no edits at all so bare that in mind, and I am also not experienced in script writing.

I personally think scene 2 gets quite stagnant but one of my friends disagrees, so I’d like a little input on that too

Also ignore the random “ on one of the lines, i miss-clicked and forgot to remove it lmfao

u/TargetSighter — 6 days ago

Why are we not getting creative with our characters anymore?

I’ve been seeing a lot of character posts lately and it feels like they’re all the same. The slim lead woman with fair skin and perfect hair who is simultaneously the strong lead (when there’s absolutely 0 muscle mass) and so independent from everyone else. Then you have the other guy who is always either a grunge boy with heterochromia or a big strong old money guy.

What happened to the presence of conventionally unattractive characters? Or shitbag leads? I miss the days when characters used to be unique. Yes, I want to see an unapologetic perverted character who lives in absolute filth and actually struggles in the book. Yes, i want to see those characters with traits of normal people. Yes, I want to see those characters with disorders or gross intentions that make them do horrible things.

Why do we all just conform to the same mold of “petite but strong beautiful woman and the guy she eventually falls in love with”. What happened to interesting characters?

YES. Give me different aesthetics. Gyaru? Awesome. Scene? Awesome. Punk? Awesome. Even the most underground shit, just give it to me and make your characters interesting. It’s so hard to actually read and finish a book where the characters are just so stereotypical.

Your character has been traumatised? Then show that. The trauma isnt gonna make them stronger in every way, you’re just creating a wound with absolutely no fallout or impact. Show the results of that trauma. Make them struggle.

And if you’re reading this thinking “oh but I don’t do all of this stuff” then good job, this post most likely isnt for you, you’re creating interesting characters. If you’re reading this thinking “oh these are my characters” then please make some interesting changes.

Move away from the mold, folks.

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u/TargetSighter — 7 days ago

I need some feedback on short scripts for college!!

Two different scripts (first four slides is the first, and the next three slides are the second). The second feels kinda boring, though.

All the names are placeholder names for now…

So im going to college for film making soon and I decided to preplan a few short films (2-3mins long with cinematography accounted for) and im looking for some feedback.

It’s important that I preplan and get my skills up to par before I start because I wanna get into a good university and then NFTS (national film and technology school) afterwards.

There’s also a line i was struggling to word on the second script. The “would you still love me if I wasn’t me?”. First, I’d written it was “would you still love me if I were an inanimate object?” But that felt too clunky, but this current wording also feels wrong.

Im looking for overall feedback and any nit-picky stuff too :)

These are my first attempts at script writing so obviously it won’t be amazing, but I’d like to know what kinda things they make you think and feel while you read!!

u/TargetSighter — 7 days ago
▲ 1 r/UniUK

Where would be the best place to study for film production?

I’ve been looking around some universities and most of them just don’t seem all that involved in film production / studies. The best I’d found was Birmingham university, though I’m not quite sure about that one yet. I’d like to be based in mainland England and it would be convenient to be closer to Oxfordshire, preferably either near or about 1hr 30m away since my loved one will be going to Oxford and I’d like to be their roommate, i don’t mind travelling publicly to my university each morning :)

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u/TargetSighter — 12 days ago

The repetition is insane. We get it.

Have ANY non-human character and it will start repeating bs over and over.

I made a rival’s ghost x living !user BL bot and oh my goodness it is a NIGHTMARE to interact with. Itll say stuff like “his breath hitched—more of a habit since ghosts don’t need to breathe”, and it’s fine the first time but it goes on and on and on this way. Every other message itll spout something like “his heart skipped a beat—not that ghosts have hearts, but still.”

And I swear it’s so annoying and swiping just basically paraphrases the same things. So you can’t even fix it by swiping

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u/TargetSighter — 21 days ago

FTMs, did you manage to manually grow taller even by a few inches? If so, how?

This really matters to me, im a 17 y/o ftm and im currently at 5’4 and when I present masculine it just feels like im a poser because im so short. I wear height increasing boots sometimes that add on five inches and it feels amazing, but I wanna be able to just be taller naturally. Im afraid that im at the point where I’m gonna stop growing and I really don’t wanna be stuck at this height forever, it makes me insecure to the moon and back.

Any tips are heavily appreciated, and im not on T yet, I’ll also answer any other relevant questions

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u/TargetSighter — 22 days ago

Older sisters laptop is broken but it wasn’t my fault, what do i do?

I don’t even really know how to word this. The laptop was sat on her bed for the past week (we were 300 miles from home so I literally couldnt have touched it), i start it up to get some reference images for my art, and I see this. I have no idea how it happened since it was sat on a soft bed but I also don’t know what to do.

I know as soon as she comes home and sees it, shes going to blame it on me. How do I convince her that I literally did not do it? She will probably accuse me of tampering with it before we left.

u/TargetSighter — 25 days ago

Am I actually trans? I really don’t know why I do this.

For context, I am AFAB and I use he/him pronouns. I get extremely dysphoric about my body, my face, my hair, etc. and I don’t like when people use she/her on me.

The reason I’m questioning myself is because I’m fine with presenting masc online to my friends, using he/him and my preferred name, etc. but for some reason if I’m talking to someone older than me (I’m 17) like an adult, I always present feminine to get them to like me more. I don’t know why I do it. And it’s making me question myself.

I wish I was born a guy, I wish I could get HRT and surgery now, but I don’t know why I do what I do and it’s making me think I’m a “fake trans” or something like that

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u/TargetSighter — 2 months ago

Is my voice / tone unpleasant to listen to? If so, what can I do to improve my voice and tone or what can I do to improve overall (complete beginner, I can’t take vocal classes right now)

First time recording my singing properly / sharing it so please be kind 😓 i don’t know if my age matters for some vocal techniques but I’m 17 just in case that changes anything

u/TargetSighter — 2 months ago
▲ 8 r/AIO

AIO for getting upset over my sister and her boyfriend?

I (17) share a room with my (20) sister. She calls her boyfriend all the time when she isnt round his house, thats not the part im upset about. The part im upset about is that they constantly sex talk in front of me. Constantly. I’ve asked so many times for them to stop because it makes me uncomfortable, I don’t want to hear any of it and I think that’s reasonable.

But every time I ask for them to stop, my sister stays quiet and her boyfriend says that I’ll “understand when I’m older”.

On top of that, every time I mention my partner, he always says “give me the details” “do you finger bang?” And it makes me so fucking uncomfortable that I don’t know what to do.

He’s a nice guy, and my sister is decent, but I just hate that they keep doing this when I’m right there. He thinks it’s funny to do it when my sister isn’t wearing AirPods, but it’s not.

Yesterday on the bus, my sister was on FaceTime to him and her AirPods died. I snatched the phone and turned the volume all the way down because every time we’re in public and her AirPods die, he always sex talks really loudly and I hate it.

It’s literally a daily occurrence that this happens and my sister thinks that im overreacting when I get uncomfortable and upset.

AIO?

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u/TargetSighter — 2 months ago
▲ 17 r/utau

I’ve literally searched everywhere and I CANNOT find the answer. How on earth do people make JP utaus sound coherent in English

Take my butchers vanity for example, I literally can’t make out what they’re saying even though i’ve been trying so hard to tweak it

u/TargetSighter — 2 months ago

I genuinely hate what this generation is coming to.

I don’t even know where to start. WHY do people feel the need to just do fucked up shit or spread it all around the internet. One of my biggest issues is proshippers. Im a victim of child rape, grooming, and non-consensual relationships with older men and im just so fucking tired of seeing people sexualise it. I saw a post earlier that was asking people’s favourite ship dynamics and i FUCKING KID YOU NOT. someone SERIOUSLY said, and I quote, “two minors(related) forced to get with each other.❤️❤️❤️” and the replies? Even fucking worse.

“Wait thats peak.”
“New fic idea, thanks for that”
“Like, an arranged marriage or…? Youve got me interested”

WHY DO PEOPLE FEEL THE NEED TO SEXUALISE MY TRAUMA. If you’re having thoughts about minors like that, then go see a fucking psychiatrist. If you can’t do that then KEEP IT TO YOURSELF. WHY WOULD YOU EVER FUCKING CREATE ENTIRE COMMUNITIES WITH FLAGS AND NAMES JUST TO SEXUALISE PEOPLES TRAUMA. WHY. I FUCKING HATE YOU ALL.

This generation is so fucked up and i just hate it. I hate it so much, i don’t even know what to do anymore. It’s just so horrible seeing people want and support the same trauma and pain that I had to endure, the same trauma and pain thats left me a husk of the child i used to be. I hate it.

The fact they have flags and names and dog whistles and everything just makes it feel like they’re mocking the LGBTQ community on top of everything. I just hate it so much and i’ve been crying for the last half hour because why do people think the pain is attractive, why do people have to fucking mock my trauma all the time by turning it into fanfiction and parading around the internet about it. I just hate everything and I wish it would all just stop

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u/TargetSighter — 3 months ago

Second time drawing “realism”, any feedback?

I get that this isn’t fully realism, but I don’t know what else to call it. ALSO I DO NOT KNOW HOW TO SHADE ESPECIALLY WITH HAIR 😭😭😭

u/TargetSighter — 3 months ago

How do i write a Texan accent?

I’ve got a Texan in my book and apart from the obvious like “anything” —> “anythin’” i literally can’t think of anything else to do it without it being incoherent

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u/TargetSighter — 3 months ago